People in their 40s are the highest-paid group in companies so they have become the main target of t
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As increasing average life expectancy of people, poverty of the elderly became big social problem.
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The failure of business is the reason and also, they lose their job at early age relatively.
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In Korea, especially, people marry lately so, they should support their family yet when they lose their job in 40’s.
>>In Korea, especially, people marry late so, they should support their family yet they lose their job in their 40’s.
However, many companies want to get young workers who have new thought and sense.
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Also, companies can employ more workers as firing workers in 40’s.
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Because they receive more salary than new employees.
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It is more efficient activity.
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It is hard problem because we are free market economy system.
>>It is a hard problem because we are in a free market economy system.
The government can’t interfere companies’s decision.
>>The government can’t interfere companies’ decision.
But, the government should provide system for them through welfare.
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For example, they provide education which can learn new skill for having a new job.
>>For example, they provide education which they can learn new skills for having a new job.
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