Percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features
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There are 7 kind of mobile phone features.
Generally, percentages of using mobile phone features in 2010 are increased from in 2006.
Firstly, percentages of make calls are basically levelled off for 4years.
Percentages of take photos and send&receive text messages are gradually getting increased.
Furthermore, owners are rapidly started to using play games and music from 2006 to 2010.
Plus, data of search the Internet and record video could not find in 2006. but, percentages of owner\'s using are incredibly increased from 2008 to 2010.
In conclusion, this graph can show that mobile phone owners are using smartphone more than before.
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There are 7 kind of mobile phone features.
>> Correct
Generally, percentages of using mobile phone features in 2010 are increased from in 2006.
Generally, percentages of using mobile phone features in 2010 are increased from in 2006.
>> Generally, the percentage of using mobile phone features in 2010 increased from that in 2006.
Firstly, percentages of make calls are basically levelled off for 4years.
Firstly, percentages of make calls are basically levelled off for 4years.
>> Firstly, the percentages of making calls were basically leveled off for 4 years.
Percentages of take photos and send&receive text messages are gradually getting increased.
Percentages of take photos and send&receive text messages are gradually getting increased.
>> Percentages of taking photos and sending and receiving text messages were gradually increasing.
Furthermore, owners are rapidly started to using play games and music from 2006 to 2010.
Furthermore, owners are rapidly started to using play games and music from 2006 to 2010.
>> Furthermore, owners started playing games and listening to music from 2006 to 2010.
Plus, data of search the Internet and record video could not find in 2006.
Plus, data of search the Internet and record video could not find in 2006.
>> Data for searching the Internet and recording videos were not available in 2006.
but, percentages of owner\'s using are incredibly increased from 2008 to 2010.
>> However, the percentages of owners\' mobile use increased from 2008 to 2010.
In conclusion, this graph can show that mobile phone owners are using smartphone more than before.
In conclusion, this graph can show that mobile phone owners are using smartphone more than before.
>> In conclusion, this table can show that mobile phone owners are using smartphones more than before.
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