Perfect city
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Hello Jay!(\",)
I believe the perfect city will depend on the age of a person. Young people would like to live in a big city like Seoul but most old people would like to live in the countryside where the air is fresh. I guess you get tired of the city noise after you age.(\",)
~Lynn
There are many conditions for a perfect city such as many infrastructures, public transportation, many stores and so on.
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I think almost all cities in Korea are already developed and similar to each other cities, so there is not big difference among them.
>> I think almost all cities in Korea are already developed and similar to each other, so there is no big difference among them.
I think where my house is located is important because every city has sites where few people live and also has sites where many people live.
>> I think where my house is located is important because there are cities where few people live and there are also places where many people live.
Of course, there are many convinient services and buildings near the sites where many people live.
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Thus, I think there is no standard to choose the conditions for a perfect city.
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If I want to live in quiet sites, just choose outside of the city.
>> If I want to live in quiet sites, I\'ll just choose to live outside the city.
In my case, I chose Adelaide, Australia because I want to live in quite city and want to meet many foreign people.
>> In my case, I chose Adelaide, Australia because I want to live in a quiet city and I want to meet many foreign people.
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