Perseverance

2020-04-28 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

학생이 쓴 원문

Sometimes human can control emotion and perseverance is the factor of it. We persevere to make the situation better. It is hard to persevere but it is necessary to important circumstance. When we fight with friend, we give scar to them by language. We should think just a moment and then say our opinion. I think that thinking just a moment is the perseverance even though it is a few seconds. I find some idioms about persevering hardship. Every cloud has a silver lining. No pain, no gain. No cross, no crown. After a storm comes a calm. April showers bring may flowers. These idioms tell me that good days will come if I make effort and persevere it. But sometimes excessive perseverance takes us to trouble. We have to persevere in appropriate situation. The balance of moderate perseverance and expression is important in our life.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

Thank you for submitting your homework.
I  agree that we need perseverance in our life. 
I wish you the best in life. We can do this! ^^

~Teacher Gina

Sometimes human can control emotion and perseverance is the factor of it. 
>> Sometimes humans can control an emotion and perseverance is the factor for it. 
We persevere to make the situation better. 
>> CORRECT.
It is hard to persevere but it is necessary to important circumstance. 
>> It is hard to persevere but it is necessary to important circumstances. 
When we fight with friend, we give scar to them by language. 
>> When we fight with a friend, we give a scar to them by the language we used. 
We should think just a moment and then say our opinion.
>>  We should think in a moment first before saying our opinion.
I think that thinking just a moment is the perseverance even though it is a few seconds.
>> I think, thinking for just a moment is a form of perseverance even though it is just for a few seconds.
I find some idioms about persevering hardship.
>> CORRECT.
Every cloud has a silver lining. No pain, no gain. No cross, no crown. After a storm comes a calm. April showers bring may flowers. 
>> CORRECT.
These idioms tell me that good days will come if I make effort and persevere it. 
>> CORRECT.
But sometimes excessive perseverance takes us to trouble. 
>> CORRECT.
We have to persevere in appropriate situation. 
>> We have to persevere in appropriate situations. 
The balance of moderate perseverance and expression is important in our life.
>> CORRECT.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·