Person and government / company are different.
학생이 쓴 원문
Charity is operated many variously progrms though capital.
This capital is used to eat free and stay homless shelter for helpful people.
But We can\'t force to donate of person deed. It is just believe Person\'s moral.
In cantrast, I think Company and government have to donate to charity. Goverment have to care about country of whole and company become social company
Person and government / company are different.
강사 첨삭
Woah! Your essay today is the longest so far Un! Good job! Keep writing! You make a strong moral point that individuals should not be forced to donate, but rather act from personal values. To improve, you could organize your ideas a bit more clearly and expand on why companies and governments must support charities. Adding specific examples or evidence would also strengthen your argument. Check the revisions! See you!
This capital is used to eat free and stay homless shelter for helpful people.
But We can\'t force to donate of person deed. It is just believe Person\'s moral.
In cantrast, I think Company and government have to donate to charity.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Charity is operated many variously progrms though capital.
REVISED: Charities operate various programs through the capital they receive.
This capital is used to eat free and stay homless shelter for helpful people.
REVISED: This capital is used to provide free meals and shelter for people in need.
But We can\'t force to donate of person deed. It is just believe Person\'s moral.
REVISED: However, we cannot force individuals to donate; it should be based on personal morals and beliefs.
In cantrast, I think Company and government have to donate to charity.
REVISED: In contrast, I believe companies and governments have a responsibility to donate to charity.
Goverment have to care about country of whole and company become social company
REVISED: The government must take care of the entire country, and companies should act as socially responsible entities.
REVISED: The government must take care of the entire country, and companies should act as socially responsible entities.
Person and government / company are different.
REVISED: Individuals and organizations like the government or companies play different roles in society.
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