personal achievement
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I joined tennis club in Qingdao 2017, for one of my business partner ask me join.
At that time, I was a beginner, who just played tennis for fun.
The club consists of 60 people, and is divided into 3 leagues. the Beginner league, the Intermediate, And the Advance.
Unfortunately, I was the poorest even in the beginner level.
The club only plays games of doubles, I fell sorry for my partner losing most of the games.
To improve my tennis skill I tried hard. I found a coach, who can give me lesson from 5 AM to 6 AM. And I had taken his lesson everyday, even when the winter season, I did not stop. As the result, a year later I got the 1st winner in monthly tournament and I was also selected Most Improved Player of the year.
It may be very small, but I think this is meaningful example how I set my goal, and do my best consistently to achieve the goal.
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I\'m happy to read and correct your personal achievements. ^_^
I joined tennis club in Qingdao 2017, for one of my business partner ask me join.
>>>I joined a tennis club in Qingdao last 2017 when one of my business partners asked me join to.
At that time, I was a beginner, who just played tennis for fun.
>>>At that time, I was a beginner who just played tennis for fun.
The club consists of 60 people, and is divided into 3 leagues. the Beginner league, the Intermediate, And the Advance.
>>>The club consists of 60 people and it\'s divided into 3 leagues, which are beginner, intermediate and Advance league.
Unfortunately, I was the poorest even in the beginner level.
>>>Unfortunately, I was the weakest even in the beginner level.
The club only plays games of doubles, I fell sorry for my partner losing most of the games.
>>>The club only plays games of doubles and I felt sorry for my partner because we\'re losing most of the games.
To improve my tennis skill I tried hard.
>>>I tried hard to improve my tennis skills.
I found a coach, who can give me lesson from 5 AM to 6 AM.
>>>I looked for a coach who can give me lessons from 5 AM to 6 AM.
And I had taken his lesson everyday, even when the winter season, I did not stop.
>>>I had taken his lesson every day and I did not stop even in the winter season.
As the result, a year later I got the 1st winner in monthly tournament and I was also selected Most Improved Player of the year.
>>>As the result, I got my first win in monthly tournament a year later and I was also selected as the Most Improved Player of the year.
It may be very small, but I think this is meaningful example how I set my goal, and do my best consistently to achieve the goal.>>>It may be very small, but I think this is a meaningful example how I set my goals and I do my best consistently to achieve it.
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