Personal request (5/5)

Hi Allen!

That\'s the end of it.

I hope that this helped you a lot.

See you in class!

~~ Teacher Sharon

As I wrote, I would get many things at the end of the study in Canada.

>> As I was writing, I knew that I would gain many things by the end of my study in Canada.
In addition, the company that I have worked at is one of the famous telecommunication companies and I also have many practical experiences at this company.

>> In addition, the company that I have worked for is a famous telecommunication company and I also have many practical experiences in this company.
If my present abilities are added with these achievements from Canada, It is enough to be employed other major company.

>> If my present abilities are added with these achievements from Canada, it would be enough to be employed by another major company.
After the re-employment in Korea, I will take the better job conditions, design many IT architectures and projects using the wide knowledge.

>> After my re-employment in Korea, I will have better job conditions, design many IT architecture and projects using my wide knowledge.
Moreover, I will cooperate with various companies in the world to acquire solutions for my projects using the developed English skill and understand on western cultures.

>> Moreover, I will cooperate with various companies in the world to acquire solutions for my projects using developed English skills and understanding of western culture.
I expect that these abilities and results will give promotion chances, earn the higher salary and live with more and more happiness

>> I expect that these abilities and results will open promotion opportunities, lead to a higher salary and a life of happiness.
Above all, I’m convinced that the meaningful memory and energy made from Canada will be source to be full of life in Korea.

>> Above all, I’m convinced that the meaningful memory and energy that I will get in Canada will be the source of a full life in Korea.
Thanks for reading my plans.

>> Correct