pets\' impact!
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I think that pets have both a positive and negative influences on our health.
Health what I said here means mental health.
For example of a positive influence, pets sometimes give people comfort and joy and even share them with people.
While people are giving and taking them, at that time they will be feeling so good.
But if people prefer to like pets than person, it may be have a negative influence on us.
I think, Eventually, people can be alone forever. which is a negative impact.
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H[이름]!
Thank you for taking note of my recommendations the last time.
You really gave good examples this time.
Take note of the suggestions below.
I think there are some ideas that we need to discuss in class.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I think that pets have both a positive and negative influences on our health.
>> I think that pets have both positive and negative influence on our health.
Health what I said here means mental health.
Health what I said here means mental health.
>> I\'m referring to mental health.
For example of a positive influence, pets sometimes give people comfort and joy and even share them with people.
For example of a positive influence, pets sometimes give people comfort and joy and even share them with people.
>> An example of positive influence is when pets sometimes give people comfort and joy and even share them with people.
While people are giving and taking them, at that time they will be feeling so good.
While people are giving and taking them, at that time they will be feeling so good.
>> When people give and take them, they would feel so good.
But if people prefer to like pets than person, it may be have a negative influence on us.
But if people prefer to like pets than person, it may be have a negative influence on us.
>> However, if people prefer pets than people, it may have negative influence on us.
I think, Eventually, people can be alone forever. which is a negative impact.
I think, Eventually, people can be alone forever. which is a negative impact.
>> I think, eventually, people can be alone forever which is a negative impact.
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