Philippines' trip

2017-10-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jacey

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We arrived at 6:30 am earlier than our prediction The diving resort closed and we couldn't see other person in there So, We went around to find a store, first because I needed sim card and load card for 100 peso while I stay in Philippines When we came back there again, we could enter in there and the family of the resort with Filipino and Korean welcomed us gladly After breakfast, I and my friend decided to practice diving in the pool until before lunch time My friend hasn't dived for a long time so he needed to practice it for our safety and I was beside him for helping although I could dive with other diving team And then we dived once at afternoon in the sea near the diving resort Whenever I dived, I always have felt that I was here in another world and was interested a living marine life So I love them ans I am sure that the reason why I wish I come here in Anilao, Mabini, Batangas feel these things And then at that night, I mista.. To be continued....

강사 첨삭

Hello, sir [이름]! :)

Thanks for sharing your experience here in the Philippines.

I have never tried diving before.

I like to swim but I am afraid of deep waters.

It must have been wonderful for you.

I\'m glad to hear that!

~ Jacey

We arrived at 6:30 am earlier than our prediction

>> We arrived at our destination at 6:30 Am, earlier than we predicted.

The diving resort closed and we couldn\'t see other person in there
>> The diving resort was closed and we couldn\'t see any person inside.

So, We went around to find a store, first because I needed sim card and load card for 100 peso while I stay in Philippines
>> So, we went around and looked for a store first because I needed a sim card and a load card worth 100 pesos while I stay in the Philippines.

When we came back there again, we could enter in there and the family of the resort with Filipino and Korean welcomed us gladly
>> When we came back to the resort, we were able to enter and the family who owned the resort welcomed us gladly.

After breakfast, I and my friend decided to practice diving in the pool until before lunch time
>> Correct!

My friend hasn\'t dived for a long time so he needed to practice it for our safety and I was beside him for helping although I could dive with other

diving team

>> My friend hasn\'t dived for a long time so he needed to practice it for safety purposes and I was beside him to help although I could dive with the other diving team.

And then we dived once at afternoon in the sea near the diving resort

>> And then we dived once in the afternoon in the sea near the diving resort.

Whenever I dived, I always have felt that I was here in another world and was interested a living marine life
>> Whenever I dive, I always feels like I was in another world and I was interested in living a marine life.

So I love them ans I am sure that the reason why I wish I come here in Anilao, Mabini, Batangas feel these things
>> I love them and I am sure that the reason why I keep coming back here in Anilao, Mabini, Batangas.

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