planet escape

2011-09-14 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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On september 11th, I watched a movie named planet escape in primus theater. The movie was based on the concept of people's egocentrism. People wanted to make new medcine for patients who have Alzheimer's so scientists had experimented on chimpanzees. AZI-112 was successful. From that chimpanzee, a chimpanzee named caesar was born and lived in a pure surrounding, however, he become violent after seeing people bad sides. He was in a animal shelter but it was not a shelter. It was a place where they do cruel manners on chimpanzees. So, he made a revolution against people. This movie made me think of others too.

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Hi there,        Wow! I think I watched that movie but the title was different. The title was Rise of the Planet of the Apes Will Rodman (James Franco) is a San Francisco scientist at pharmaceutical company Gen-Sys who has been trying to develop a cure for Alzheimer's disease by testing a genetically engineered retrovirus on chimpanzees. The virus mutates the chimpanzees giving them a human level of intelligence. The most successful subject a female chimpanzee named Bright Eyes goes on a rampage because she believes her baby to whom she secretly gave birth, is threatened she is killed disrupting a board meeting where Will is presenting the cure. Will's boss Steven Jacobs orders chimp handler Robert Franklin) to put all the test chimpanzees down Franklin cannot bring himself to kill the baby chimp and instead gives him to Will. His father names him Caesar and Will raises him in his house. Caesar has inherited his mother's high intelligence and learns and develops quickly. After three years Caesar has outgrown his surroundings. One day, after frightening their neighbor Hunsiker's children and earning a cut on his leg in the process, Will takes Caesar to San Francisco Zoo where primatologist Caroline Aranha treats his injuries and is impressed how Will taught him to sign. Then eventually he learned that people are not as kind as he thought so he he begun a revolution. This is an interesting story.   On september 11th I watched a movie named planet escape in primus theater. >> On september 11th I watched a movie named planet escape in primus theater. >> On september 11th I watched a movie entitled planet escape in primus theater. The movie was based on the concept of people's egocentrism. >>CorrectPeople wanted to make new medcine for patients who have Alzheimer's so scientists had experimented on chimpanzees. >> People wanted to make new medcine for patients who have Alzheimer's disease so scientists experimented on chimpanzees. AZI-112 was successful. >>Correct From that chimpanzee, a chimpanzee named caesar was born and lived in a pure surrounding, however, he become violent after seeing people bad sides. >> From that chimpanzee a chimpanzee named Caesar was born and lived in a pure surrounding, however, he became violent after seeing people's bad sides. He was in an animal shelter but it was not a shelter. >> It was in an animal care but it was not a shelter.  It was a place where they do cruel manners on chimpanzees. >>It was a place where they do cruel things on chimpanzees.  So, he made a revolution against people. >>CorrectThis movie made me think of others too. >>Correct

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