Planning a career.

2020-04-29 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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There are many things that one should consider when planning a career, ranging from the expected income to personal predisposition. Among many, factors that I value the most are the degree of autonomy and the independence which usually go hand in hand with each other. By referring the autonomy, I mean predominantly about how freely I am able to organize tasks in accordance with my daily routines. There would be no problem with a fixed working hours for me, however, I don\'t want a person next to me urging what I should do next and correcting what could have been done better. Meanwhile, the independence in this respect refers to no pressure from a third party. As a researcher, I investigate social phenomena based on theoretical frameworks that I find useful for each case, meaning I won\'t publish an article in favor of particular stakeholders within a certain study area. So, if there is a position that guarantees such environments, I will go for it without hesitation.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for sharing your thoughts Drexel! I really appreciate it!
Nice job! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

There are many things that one should consider when planning a career, ranging from the expected income to personal predisposition. 
>>CORRECT
Among many, factors that I value the most are the degree of autonomy and the independence which usually go hand in hand with each other. 
>>Among many factors, the ones I value the most are the degree of autonomy and the independence that usually go hand in hand together.
By referring the autonomy, I mean predominantly about how freely I am able to organize tasks in accordance with my daily routines. 
>>CORRECT
There would be no problem with a fixed working hours for me, however, I don\'t want a person next to me urging what I should do next and correcting what could have been done better. 
>>CORRECT (or you can say, I prefer not to have someone breathing down my neck all the time.)
Meanwhile, the independence in this respect refers to no pressure from a third party.
>>CORRECT
As a researcher, I investigate social phenomena based on theoretical frameworks that I find useful for each case, meaning I won\'t publish an article in favor of particular stakeholders within a certain study area. 
>>CORRECT
So, if there is a position that guarantees such environments, I will go for it without hesitation.
>>CORRECT

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