plans to do on weekend
학생이 쓴 원문
yesterday, i went to the beach with my family.
it was ranny in the morning, but it started to stop rainning fom afternoon.
i don't like people crowded and sticky day.
so it was good wether for me.
the sea water is very cool to swim and play with tube.
the wave is low.
i didn't see any women wearing bikini.
but there are women in bikini in Bu-san city.
a shark came out in East-sea according to the news.
what a surprise.
anyway, i prefer to the indoor swimming pool.
강사 첨삭
HelloTracy,
I'm happy to receive your composition
about your weekend acitivities. I envy
you because you were able to go swimming.
I really love swimming! Take care.
See you in the class tomorrow!
Love,
Verna
yesterday, i went to the beach with my family.
>> Correctit was ranny in the morning, but it started to stop rainning fom afternoon.
>>it was raining in the morning, but it started to stop raining in the afternoon.i don't like people crowded and sticky day.
>> I don't like it when people are crowded because it makes me the day sticky.so it was good wether for me.
>> So it was a good weather for me.the sea water is very cool to swim and play with tube.
>> Correctthe wave is low.
>> Correcti didn't see any women wearing bikini.
>> Correctbut there are women in bikini in Bu-san city.
>> Correcta shark came out in East-sea according to the news.
>> Correctwhat a surprise!
Correct anyway, i prefer to the indoor swimming pool.
Anyway, I still prefer indoor swimming pool.
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