Plastic surgery 2
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Having plastic surgery is not a problem but the mess media that is boosting having plastic surgery.
>> Having plastic surgery is not a problem but the mass media which is boosting on having plastic surgery.
And If some one have happy through plastic surgery. Why it is bad?
>> And If some one is happy through plastic surgery. Why it is bad?
For example, we can watch a lot of TV commercial about foods that is not good for our health such as oiled food , Coke , junk food and so on.
>> For example, we can watch a lot of TV commercials about foods which are not good to our health such as oily and fatty foods , Coke , junk food and so on.
But people who are watching this kind of ads right to make a decision to eat or not.
>> But people who are watching these kind of ads have the right to make a decision to eat it or not.
Like this, Having plastic surgery is a totally personal choice.
>> Like this, Having a plastic surgery is totally a personal choice.
I also totally agree with that.
>> correct!
We have a right to decide how we live in our life.
>> We have the right to decide how we live our lives.
And I think that if a job seekers can grip good chance to work in good position through plastic surgery, Why not?
>> And I think that if a job seeker can grip a good chance to work in good position through plastic surgery, Why not?
When it comes to Plastic surgery, It is on the personal choice.
>> correct!
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