Plastic surgery

2015-11-02 · 첨삭 강사 Kathrine

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Today, I would like to about very common topic that Is the plastic surgery is good or bad. It is a very common and old topic and I remember that I talked about it several times. It sounds like easy topic to debate. And I am also be used to talk about it. But Shooters who are panels in my favorite program were totally different. They were divided into two in the program as well. But their opinion was based on very concreted knowledge and they showed their opinions logically. The panels who think that plastic surgery is not good said that human has a natural beauty inside. Because of lookism people are force to be pushed to having plastic surgery. And mess media in Korea has been also boosting go under the knife. Indeed, Is it right phenomenon? The other panels opposed their opinion. Having plastic surgery is a personal choice. We don’t have the right to judge them.

강사 첨삭

Today, I would like to about very common topic that Is the plastic surgery is good or bad.

>> Today, I would like to about a very common topic and that is whether plastic surgery is good or bad.
 It is a very common and old topic and I remember that I talked about it several times.
>> correct!

It sounds like easy topic to debate.

>> It sounds like an easy topic for a debate. 

And I am also be used to talk about it.

>> correct! 
 But Shooters who are panels in my favorite program were totally different. 

>> correct!  
 They were divided into two in the program as well.

>> correct!  
 But their opinion was based on very concreted knowledge and they showed their opinions logically.
>> 
correct!   
The panels who think that plastic surgery is not good said that human has a natural beauty inside.

>>  correct!    

Because of lookism people are force to be pushed to having plastic surgery.

>> Because of lookism people are forced/ pushed to have plastic surgery. 

And mess media in Korea has been also boosting go under the knife. 

>> And the mass media in Korea has also been boosting to go under the knife. 
 Indeed, Is it right phenomenon?
>> 
Indeed, Is it a right phenomenon? 
The other panels opposed their opinion.

>> correct!     

Having plastic surgery is a personal choice.

>>  correct!     

We don’t have the right to judge them.

>>  correct!     

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