Play games for you :)
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, Ella
I'm glad to hear that you enjoy games which are Super Easy!!
As you didn't remember titles what you had played,
I found that you don't play games for a long time a day.
I love game because of its creativity.
Also there are a lot of educational things,
because most of the base of stories are in the myth or bible.
But addiction is the biggest problem which we should overcome.
It's ironic that to think of addiction, the interest is gone down
(that is directly related to revenue of company) and
to think of interest, the game is regarded as drug.
My goal of the work is making people positive about playing game.
Someday, shall we play Tekken6 togather? :)
(A person who lose must eat a balut.)
강사 첨삭
Dear [이름] [이름],
You always make me laugh while reading your compositions! Yeah, those are the kinds of games I like to play..."the super duper easy ones" or games that babies can play...like Super Mario, Crash Bandicoot, Metal Slug, etc. hahaha. I don't want to be stressed when playing games. I just want to have fun. You should try playing Plants VS. Zombies. It's very addictive.hahaha
Wow! You have a very profound thinking about addiction. You almost gave me a nosebleed.hahaha.
Anyway, okay let's play Tekken together. Send me one of your controllers.hahaha. I'll practice so I will beat you!hahaha. Game on!!!n (You will not like balut.I'll make you beg for mercy!"hahaha)
Hello, Ella>>Hello, Ella.I'm glad to hear that you enjoy games which are Super Easy!!>>CORRECTAs you didn't remember titles what you had played, I found that you don't play games for a long time a day.>>As you didn't remember the titles of the games that you played, I think that you don't play games for long hours a day.I love game because of its creativity.
>>I love a game because of its creativity. Also there are a lot of educational things, because most of the base of stories are in the myth or bible.>>Also, there are lots of educational things because most of the stories are based on myths or the bible.But addiction is the biggest problem which we should overcome.>>CORRECTIt's ironic that to think of addiction, the interest is gone down (that is directly related to revenue of company) and to think of interest, the game is regarded as drug.>>It's ironic that to think of addiction, the interest decrease (that is directly related to revenue of company) and to think of interest, the game is regarded as drug.My goal of the work is making people positive about playing game.
>>My goal in my work is making people think positively about playing games.Someday, shall we play Tekken6 togather? :)
>>Someday, shall we play Tekken together?(A person who lose must eat a balut.)
>>The person who'll lose must eat a Balut.
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