Player Unknown\'s Battle grounds
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The name of my favorite online game is \'Player Unknown\'s Battle grounds\'.
In the game, if a player gets a special gun and shoot it up in the sky, an airplane comes to the ground where the player is.
Then a box is thrown outside of the plane and players can bring special items from the box.
On saturday, I saw a costume player wearing the special items of my favorite game.
I ran to catch him and we took a picture together. He allowed me to touch his fake gun. Though it is not real, it must be quite expensive.
After my photo time, many parents around us noticed him and asked him to take pictures with their kids.
He became a star in the festival. I was glad to see that, because he looked feeling awkward before people had interest in him.
I guess he wanted attention of the visitors in the catsle. I felt thanks to him because he didn\'t let other kids touch his gun but only me.
Happy to be an adult LOL
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The name of my favorite online game is \'Player Unknown\'s Battle grounds\'.
>>Correct
In the game, if a player gets a special gun and shoot it up in the sky, an airplane comes to the ground where the player is.
In the game, if a player gets a special gun and shoot it up in the sky, an airplane comes to the ground where the player is.
>>Correct
Then a box is thrown outside of the plane and players can bring special items from the box.
Then a box is thrown outside of the plane and players can bring special items from the box.
>>Correct
On saturday, I saw a costume player wearing the special items of my favorite game.
On saturday, I saw a costume player wearing the special items of my favorite game.
>>On Saturday, I saw a costume player wearing the special items of my favorite game.
I ran to catch him and we took a picture together.
I ran to catch him and we took a picture together.
>>Correct
He allowed me to touch his fake gun.
>>Correct
Though it is not real, it must be quite expensive.
>>Correct
After my photo time, many parents around us noticed him and asked him to take pictures with their kids.
After my photo time, many parents around us noticed him and asked him to take pictures with their kids.
>>Correct
He became a star in the festival.
He became a star in the festival.
>>Correct
I was glad to see that, because he looked feeling awkward before people had interest in him.
>>Correct
I guess he wanted attention of the visitors in the catsle.
I guess he wanted attention of the visitors in the catsle.
>>I guess he wanted attention of the visitors in the castle.
I felt thanks to him because he didn\'t let other kids touch his gun but only me.
>>I felt grateful to him because he didn\'t let other kids touch his gun except me.
Happy to be an adult LOL
Happy to be an adult LOL
>>Correct
>>I am happy to be an adult. Lol!
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