Playing in the Amusement Park
학생이 쓴 원문
I want to visit the amusement park. In May of last year I went to the amusement park, because I got a discount in May. It was very fun and exciting. Since that, I have expected to go to the amusement for a year. I want to ride a merry-go-round, viking, bumper car, and so on with my friends. I hope that I can play in the amusement park in May 2021. I wish that the vaccine of Covid-19 will be developed soon for the world.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
Good evening!
Thank you for submitting your composition to me.
I really hope that you will be able to go back to the amusement park soon.
I hope that the vaccine will be developed soon so that our worries of going outside will be gone too. ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> CORRECT.
In May of last year I went to the amusement park, because I got a discount in May.
>> In May last year, I went to the amusement park because I got a discount for the month.
It was very fun and exciting.
>> CORRECT.
Since that, I have expected to go to the amusement for a year.
>> Since then, I had expected myself to go to the amusement park for a year.
I want to ride a merry-go-round, viking, bumper car, and so on with my friends.
>> CORRECT.
I hope that I can play in the amusement park in May 2021.
>> CORRECT.
I wish that the vaccine of Covid-19 will be developed soon for the world.
>> I wish that the vaccine for Covid-19 will be developed soon for the world.
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