Playing with my friends
학생이 쓴 원문
I enjoy singing with my friends in singing room. Last month, I song 3hours 30minute with my friend. We wanted to sing more but we had a hoarse throat. Next time I want to sing more than 3hours. It\'s very happy to sing my playlist. Also, We enjoy eating dessert in cafe. I like macaroon and milk tea. We eat sweet and delicious dessert. There are many beautiful cafes in Korea. We enjoy playing boardgames, too. There are many interesting boardgames and I like rumicube, haligali and so on. The most thing I like is traveling with my friends. It is very happy and precious to travel with my friends. I traveled Busan, Seoul, and Taiwan with my friends. I want to travel again with my friends, but we are too busy to meet. I hope we will travel anywhere together.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, [이름]!
Thank you for submitting your composition.
I think that the things you do with your friends are all fun.
I hope that you\'ll be able to meet again so that you can travel, eat and sing in a karaoke place soon. ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> I enjoy singing with my friends in a singing room.
>> Or: I enjoy singing with my friends in a karaoke place.
Last month, I song 3hours 30minute with my friend.
>> Last month, I sang for 3 hours and 30 minutes with my friend.
We wanted to sing more but we had a hoarse throat.
>> CORRECT.
Next time I want to sing more than 3hours.
>> I want to sing for more than 3 hours next time.
It\'s very happy to sing my playlist.
>> I\'m very happy singing the songs on my playlist.
>> Or: It\'s enjoyable to sing the songs on my playlist.
Also, We enjoy eating dessert in cafe.
>> We also enjoy eating a dessert in a cafe.
I like macaroon and milk tea.
>> CORRECT.
We eat sweet and delicious dessert.
>> CORRECT.
There are many beautiful cafes in Korea.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: There are many visually appealing cafes in Korea.
We enjoy playing board games too.
>> CORRECT.
There are many interesting boardgames and I like rumicube, haligali and so on.
>> There are many interesting board games and I like Rummikub, Halli Gali and so on.
The most thing I like is traveling with my friends.
>> The thing I like most is traveling with my friends.
It is very happy and precious to travel with my friends.
>> It is a very happy and precious moment to travel with my friends.
I traveled Busan, Seoul, and Taiwan with my friends.
>> I traveled to Busan, Seoul, and Taiwan with my friends.
I want to travel again with my friends, but we are too busy to meet.
>> CORRECT.
I hope we will travel anywhere together.
>> CORRECT.
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