Please check my diary grammar and sentence!!

2023-12-26 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

Today, i went to the part time job, because we had a christmas party. i didn\\\'t happy but children\\\'s looked like happy. They were saw movie, played board game and ate chicken nuggets. My body was so hard, but they were looke happy so i was happy too. Mabye ㅎㅎ And i arrived at home ate tteokbokki and i deliveried it. After ate tteokobokki i layed on the bed and watched youtube and Football!! so today was not bad day !

강사 첨삭

Hello there Anna~!^^ So you have started writing your diary? That\'s a good decision to improve your English skills! Enjoy learning written and spoken English Anna! Get well soon too!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

Today, i went to the part time job, because we had a christmas party.

>>> Today, I went to my part time job, because it\'s our Christmas party.
i didn\\\'t happy but children\\\'s looked like happy.

>>> I was not happy but children were.
They were saw movie, played board game and ate chicken nuggets.

>>> They watched a movie, played board games and ate chicken nuggets.
My body was so hard, but they were looke happy so i was happy too.

>>> I was exhausted, but seeing them happy, I felt the same too.

Mabye ㅎㅎ

>>> Maybe...
And i arrived at home ate tteokbokki and i deliveried it.

>>> When I arrived at home, I ate delivered tteokbokki.
After ate tteokobokki i layed on the bed and watched youtube and Football!!
>>> After eating tteokobokki I laid on the bed and watched YouTube and Football!!

so today was not bad day !

>>> It was not a bad day!

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기