Please check my homework(What are some reasons why privacy is important for you?)

Hi [이름]! Thanks for sharing your thoughts about the importance of privacy.

Yes. It is very important, but there are really people out there who use other people\'s

profile and pretend. Even police officers and other authorities can\'t easily detect those people.

Those people are called \"hackers\". Hackers are people who uses a computer to connect to other

people’s computers secretly and often illegally, so that they can find or change information.

Talk to you later and have a good day. ^^

~~Teacher May~~

Privacy be wrote in the korean dictionary means one\'s private life and private affairs of the family.

>> Privacy, according to Korean dictionary, means one\'s private life and private affairs of the family.
 If someone illegally infringe privacy of other people, the victim may be a naked body.
the information that you only need to know is shared to other people without realizing for yourself.

>> The information that you can only know is the only information that has being shared to other people.
 In the present age, the internet particularly is very developed in comparison to the past.

>> These days, internet is very commonly used in comparison to the past.
 In other words, anyone who want to get your information is able to get the information in a short time through the internet.

>> Therefore, anyone who wants to get your information is able to get the information easily through the internet.
Then why is privacy so important?

>> CORRECT
First, the victim who be infringed by someone would suffer not only material damage but psychological damage.

>> First, the victim would suffer and be really affected not only physically but also emotionally.
Sencond, the information which be robbed by someone can be used in another crime.

>> Second, the information that has gotten without any permission can also be used for crimes.
Third, the information which be distributed can be imppossible to delete that.

>> Third, the information being spread could also be impossible to remove from sites.
Fourth, above all, not only the victim but other people won\'t socially believe in each other.

>> And lastly, people might not believe each other anymore.
If you think the point of view of other people, you will know that privacy is very important.

>> If you only just know other people\'s point of view, you will know how very important privacy is.