please check my sentence.
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강사 첨삭
Q1. What is the
best thing you felt after joining Bybit and what needs to be improved?
>> Correct
After joining Bybit, I was able to adapt quickly
with the help of friendly team members.
>> After joining Bybit, I was able to adapt quickly with the help of my friendly team members.
I have good teamwork with the team members who helped me adapt.
>> I work well with my team members who helped me in adapting.
It can be said that our team\'s strength is good teamwork.
>> Good teamwork is our team\'s greatest strength.
I will think about the need for improvement.
>> I will think about other things that require improvement.
There is a lot of confusion in working because there are a lot of personnel adjustments in Bybit.
>> There is a lot of confusion at work because of many personnel adjustments in Bybit.
I hope this
point will be improved
>> I hope this point will be improved.
Q2. Are you satisfied with your current team work
and your task? Are you willing to continue to develop?
>> Are you satisfied with your current teamwork and your task?
Are you willing to continue to develop?
Yes, I am very satisfied.
>> Correct
I am so happy that my ability can contribute to the company after joining the company.
>> I am so happy that, after joining the company, I can use my skills to help the organization.
I also love that there are team members and systems that I can learn.
>> I also appreciate that I can learn from my team members and the systems.
I will try to contribute to the team and the company by actively utilizing the system in Bybit.
>> I will try to contribute to the team and to the company, by actively utilizing the system in Bybit.
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