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Hi I'm [이름] [이름] [이름] from Korea I'm working in the Management Technology Education Center of LG CNS We want to submit our HPT case and result and if it is possible, We want to present our case in the 2012 ISPI Conference How can we submit and whom i contact to We'll expect your answer Thank you

HI [이름]! ^.^ You did great in your composition today. I hope that you can present your case on the 2012 ISPI Conference. :) Take Care! I'm [이름] [이름] [이름] from Korea. >> CORRECT! I'm working in the Management Technology Education Center of LG CNS. >>CORRECT!We want to submit our HPT case and result. >>CORRECT!and if it is possible, We want to present our case in the 2012 ISPI Conference>>And if it is possible, we want to present our case in the 2012 ISPI Conference.How can we submit and whom i contact to>>How can we submit it and who can I contact about this?We'll expect your answer>>Hoping for your reply.Thank you. >>CORRECT!