please,correct my introduction and todqy homework.

1. introduce myself Hello. My name is [Name] Ha. I’m 28 years-old, and I’m single. I graduated from se-jong university in 2009, and I majored in architectural engineering. After graduating from university, I went to the military. I did my military service as a platoon leader. There are four members in my family. My father, mother, older brother and me. My home town is chang-won city. My families are currently living in there except me. I live in Seoul alone so sometimes I feel lonely. My dream is becoming a plant engineer I know that my dream is very hard to come true, but I will never give it up Thank you very much for listening. 2. today home work Do you think it's a good idea to write your goals down and tick them off as you achieve them? A) YES. it is a good idea to achieve my goals. by writing my goals, I specialize my goals. also, I can be faithful to the day. by ticking my goals off, I will try to keeping my schedule.

Hi there Jin!   Happy Monday! I\'m sad because I won\'t be able to talk to you for a week. Anyway, below are the corrections for your sentences. I hope that you\'ll go over them. If you have some wuestion, raise them next week.   Take good care!   ~Teacher Shanee   1. introduce myself>>> Introducing myself >>> OR: My self-introductionHello. My name is [Name] Ha. >>> Correct! I’m 28 years-old, and I’m single. >>> Correct! I graduated from se-jong university in 2009, and I majored in architectural engineering. >>> I graduated from Sejong University in 2009 and I majored in Architectural Engineering. >>> OR: I majored in Architectural Engineering and graduated from Sejong University in 2009.After graduating from university, I went to the military. >>> After graduating from the university, I went to the military. I did my military service as a platoon leader. >>> Correct!There are four members in my family. My father, mother, older brother and me. >>> There are four members in my family; my father, mother, older brother and me. My home town is chang-won city. >>> My hometown is Chang-won City. My families are currently living in there except me. >>> My family members are currently living there without me. >>> OR: My family is currently living in there without me. I live in Seoul alone so sometimes I feel lonely. >>> Correct!My dream is becoming a plant engineer >>> My dream is to become a plant engineer. I know that my dream is very hard to come true, but I will never give it up >>> I know that my dream is very hard to achive, but I will never give up. Thank you very much for listening.>>> Correct!2. today home work>>> Today\'s HomeworkDo you think it\'s a good idea to write your goals down and tick them off as you achieve them?A) YES. it is a good idea to achieve my goals. >>> Correct! >>> OR: It is a good way to achieve my goals. by writing my goals, I specialize my goals. >>> By writing my goals, I can realize my priorities and my biggest goals in life. also, I can be faithful to the day. >>> Also, I will try my best to reach these goals on time. by ticking my goals off, I will try to keeping my schedule. >>> After ticking my goals off, I will try to keep my schedule.