Please expound your answers.
학생이 쓴 원문
Do you feel proud when someone from your country become famous all over the world? Please expound your answers.
Yes, I do!
Nowadays Kim yu na is very famous all over the world because of her skating.
She is a figure skater. She plays very nice so she got medals from many
competitions.
Because of her, many people all over the world knows Korea.
But Why should I be happy if Korea is popular.
The reason why I am one of the member of Korea.
If my country has power everybody in other contries will treat me as very
important person!
When I was in Australia, they was biased on me because I am a Korean.
They treated Japanese more impotantly....
This is the one of the reason....
So I am very proud of people who make Korea ver popular.
강사 첨삭
Hello there^^
Thanks for sharing me about this one. Upon reading your composition I can feel that your are really proud being Korean.
I hope that people from other countries will stop discriminating other races. I feel sad about your experience in Australia.
Anyways, lets concentrat on how are we going to make our own countries proud of us. Thanks for this one^^
TEACHER LENY^^
Do you feel proud when someone from your country become famous all over the world? Please expound your answers.Yes, I do! >>CorrectNowadays Kim yu na is very famous all over the world because of her skating.>>Nowadays, Kin Yu-na is very famous all over the world becaus of her skills in skating.She is a figure skater. She plays very nice so she got medals from many competitions.>>CorrectBecause of her, many people all over the world knows Korea.>>Because of her, many people all over the world got to know more about Korea.But Why should I be happy if Korea is popular.>>But why do I get happy whenever Korea gets popular.The reason why I am one of the member of Korea.>>Correct
>> The reason is that, I am a Korean.If my country has power everybody in other contries will treat me as very important person!>>If my country is the most powerful country all over the world, other people in other countries will treat me as a very
important person.When I was in Australia, they was biased on me because I am a Korean.>>When I was in Ausrtralia they dicriminated me because I am a Korean.They treated Japanese more impotantly....>>Correct.This is the one of the reason....So I am very proud of people who make Korea ver popular.
>>This is one of the reason why I am very proud of the people who make my country popular.
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