Please expound your answers.

2013-03-19 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Do you feel proud when someone from your country become famous all over the world? Please expound your answers. Yes, I do! Nowadays Kim yu na is very famous all over the world because of her skating. She is a figure skater. She plays very nice so she got medals from many competitions. Because of her, many people all over the world knows Korea. But Why should I be happy if Korea is popular. The reason why I am one of the member of Korea. If my country has power everybody in other contries will treat me as very important person! When I was in Australia, they was biased on me because I am a Korean. They treated Japanese more impotantly.... This is the one of the reason.... So I am very proud of people who make Korea ver popular.

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Hello there^^ Thanks for sharing me about this one. Upon reading your composition I can feel that your are really proud being Korean. I hope that people from other countries will stop discriminating other races. I feel sad about your experience in Australia. Anyways, lets concentrat on how are we going to make our own countries proud of us. Thanks for this one^^ TEACHER LENY^^   Do you feel proud when someone from your country become famous all over the world? Please expound your answers.Yes, I do! >>CorrectNowadays Kim yu na is very famous all over the world because of her skating.>>Nowadays, Kin Yu-na is very famous all over the world becaus of her skills in skating.She is a figure skater. She plays very nice so she got medals from many competitions.>>CorrectBecause of her, many people all over the world knows Korea.>>Because of her, many people all over the world got to know more about Korea.But Why should I be happy if Korea is popular.>>But why do I get happy whenever Korea gets popular.The reason why I am one of the member of Korea.>>Correct >> The reason is that, I am a Korean.If my country has power everybody in other contries will treat me as very important person!>>If my country is the most powerful country all over the world, other people in other countries will treat me as a very important person.When I was in Australia, they was biased on me because I am a Korean.>>When I was in Ausrtralia they dicriminated me because I am a Korean.They treated Japanese more impotantly....>>Correct.This is the one of the reason....So I am very proud of people who make Korea ver popular. >>This is one of the reason why I am very proud of the people who make my country popular.

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