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2018-04-19 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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1. What is the best thing about your birthplace? I was born in Seoul,the capital of Republic of Korea. It seems that there is nothing short of living in Seoul except for very complex. When I was child, I used to go the King Palaces in the center of Seoul because I was able to go there easily alone or with my friends and also I want to know the customs of our ancestors. Now there is well- built public transportation system such as a lot of subway lines, public buses/taxies and many kinds of trains etc.. But I think the best thing in my birthplace is the mountains surrounding the Seoul. Every weekend I can go to the mountain. 2,How is our accent affected by our birthplace? I use Korean standard language because my birthplace is Seoul. The language using in Seoul is the standard tongue in Korea. So, My accent is not affected by my birthplace at all. On the other hand, I'm very interested in conversation between peoples with their own accent in other provinces of Korea

강사 첨삭

Hi Dr. [이름]!

Thank you so much for answering the questions really well!

You are detailed expressing your ideas!

Great job again and talk to you next time!

Have a great day!

Teacher ELLY.

ESSAY QUESTIONS:

1. What is the best thing about your birthplace?

2, How is our accent affected by our birthplace?

1. What is the best thing about your birthplace?

I was born in Seoul, the capital of Republic of Korea.

>>I was born in Seoul, the capital of the Republic of Korea.

It seems that there is nothing short of living in Seoul except for very complex.

>>It seems that there is nothing short when living in Seoul, except for the complex system.

When I was child, I used to go the King Palaces in the center of Seoul

>>When I was a child, I used to go to the King’s Palaces at the center of Seoul.

because I was able to go there easily alone or with my friends

>>Because, I was able to go there easily, either alone or with my friends.

and also I want to know the customs of our ancestors.

>>And also, I want to know the customs of our ancestors.

Now there is well- built public transportation system such as a lot of subway lines, public buses/taxies and many kinds of trains etc.

>>Right now, there is a well-built public transportation system. Such as, a lot of subway lines, public buses, taxies, many kinds of trains, etc.

But I think the best thing in my birthplace is the mountains surrounding the Seoul.

>>But, I think the best thing in my birthplace are the mountains surrounding Seoul.

Every weekend I can go to the mountain.

>>Every weekend, I can go to the mountain.

 2, How is our accent affected by our birthplace?

 I use Korean standard language because my birthplace is Seoul.

>>I use the Korean standard language because my birthplace is Seoul.

or>>I use the Korean standard language because my birthplace is in Seoul.

The language using in Seoul is the standard tongue in Korea.

>>The language used in Seoul is the standard tongue in Korea.

or>>The dialect used in Seoul is considered as the standard Korean language.

So, My accent is not affected by my birthplace at all.

>>So, my accent is not affected by my birthplace at all.

On the other hand, I\'m very interested in conversation between peoples with their own accent in other provinces of Korea

>>On the other hand, I\'m very interested in conversing with people having their own accent from other provinces in Korea.

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