Please revise it asap! Thank you!
학생이 쓴 원문
2008.08 The second factory appointed HACCP by Korean food&drub administration.
Appointed HACCP by Korean food&drub administration in the second factory.
2010.11 Moving of head firm(factory) to Yangju city in Gyeonggi province.
2010.12 Establishment of an enterprise laboratory.
Establishment of an enterprise attached laboratory.
강사 첨삭
Hello there! Thank you for your composition. Kindly check some of the corrections. Anyway, have a great day!
~~ KeLLy~~
2008.08
>> Correct.
>>OR: August 2008
The second factory appointed HACCP by Korean food&drub administration.
>> The second factory was appointed by HACCP Korean Food & Drug Administration. Appointed HACCP by Korean food&drub administration in the second factory.>> HACCP was appointed by the Korean Food & Drub administration in the second factory.2010.11 Moving of head firm(factory) to Yangju city in Gyeonggi province.>> 2010. 11 They transferred the head of the factory to Yangju city in Gyeonggi province. 2010.12 Establishment of an enterprise laboratory.
>> Correct.
Establishment of an enterprise attached laboratory.
>> Correct.
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