Please tell me about a serious issue that your school faced before.
학생이 쓴 원문
A serious issue that my school faced is that our school is now in danger of being closed. I go to private highschool which is specialized at teaching foreign languages. My school was established around 1980 and has a long history. A lot of famous politicians or lawyers have graduated our school and as a result, gets a lot of investment from them. However, this fact breeds discontent to others. Some feel unjustful that only a few students are getting high-quality education from young age. As a result, as the new government was elected at 2017, the president decided to close specialized private schools around 2025. A lot of school ad[이름]istrators and teachers are fighting against the government to withdraw its decision, but the government seem to be very firm with what they have decided. Although it’s important to provide fair education to all the students in a country, I believe my school should continue to exist to cultivate more talented people.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]hee! I sympathize with you and your school! It must be tough for them because they only aim quality education! However, I hope you are still optimistic and hopeful! -Faith-
A serious issue that my school faced is that our school is now in danger of being closed.
A serious issue that my school faced is that our school is now in danger of being closed.
>> The serious issue that my school is facing now is that our school is in danger of being closed.
I go to private highschool which is specialized at teaching foreign languages.
>> I go to a private highschool which specialized at teaching foreign languages.
My school was established around 1980 and has a long history.
>> CORRECT
A lot of famous politicians or lawyers have graduated our school and as a result, gets a lot of investment from them.
>> A lot of famous politicians or lawyers have graduated from our school and as a result, it gets a lot of investment from them.
However, this fact breeds discontent to others.
>> However, this fact breeds discontentment among several people.
Some feel unjustful that only a few students are getting high-quality education from young age.
>> Some feel indignant that only a few students are getting high-quality education from a young age.
As a result, as the new government was elected at 2017, the president decided to close specialized private schools around 2025.
>> As a result, when the new president was elected at 2017, he decided to close specialized private schools around 2025.
A lot of school ad[이름]istrators and teachers are fighting against the government to withdraw its decision, but the government seem to be very firm with what they have decided.
>> A lot of school ad[이름]istrators and teachers are fighting against the government to withdraw its decision, but the government seems to be very firm with what they have decided.
Although it’s important to provide fair education to all the students in a country, I believe my school should continue to exist to cultivate more talented people.
>> Although it’s important to provide fair education to all students worldwide, I believe my school should continue to exist to cultivate more talented people.
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