Polynesian canoe makes it all around the world

2017-06-27 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

학생이 쓴 원문

Traveling around the world with a boat is very dangerous, But these people traveled around the globe without a compass or anything. They just used the stars and how the water ripples. If you think about it, it could be difficult. There will be strong waves, and many sharks or dangerous creatures. And they could be starving. Worse, they could face the Bermuda triangle. Hawaiians would be proud of that people. Bearing the hunger, and facing the danger. Because of this article, I knew that Hawaiian people are very brave, and also like the sea.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ji Su! ^^

Good evening!


Thank you for sending in a composition, 

I\'m really so sorry that we weren\'t able to talk about this adventure

because of lack of time and because of what happened. 

This is what you can really call an adventure. :)

I hope we could also have an adventu8re of our own in the future. 


See you!


Teacher Glenda 


Traveling around the world with a boat is very dangerous, But these people traveled around the globe without a compass or anything.

>> Correct

They just used the stars and how the water ripples.

>> Correct
 If you think about it, it could be difficult.

>> Correct

There will be strong waves, and many sharks or dangerous creatures. And they could be starving. Worse, they could face the Bermuda triangle. 

>> Correct
 Hawaiians would (must) be proud of that (those) people. Bearing the hunger, and facing the danger.

>> Correct

Because of this article, I knew that Hawaiian people are very brave, and also like the sea.

>> Correct

or

>> Because of this article, I now know that Hawaiian people are very brave, and also like the sea.

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