Post a picture of yourself at the most memorable festival you have been to and tell something about
학생이 쓴 원문
That\'s a picture when I visited at the concert of 1llionaire records. They are a famous crew for a rap in South Korea. At that time we sang a song together as I mentioned it to you before.
강사 첨삭
Thank you for your effort in this homework, Elic. I was hoping to see a bit more sentences, but still, thank you for answering. Please review the corrections that I have for you. Your sentences were good, although there are some extra words which I deleted in them to make them more cohesive.
>> That\'s the picture when I visited the concert of 1llionaire records.
They are a famous crew for a rap in South Korea.
>> They are a famous rap crew in South Korea.
At that time we sang a song together as I mentioned it to you before
>> At that time, we sang a song together, just as I mentioned before.
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