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2013-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Hannah

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Q39: many mothers agree that TV has bad influence on children. Can you tell me some adverse effect? There are many adverse effects on watching TV. If children watch TV for a long time, they can’t concentrate on their study. They cannot do anything when they watch TV. Of course, it relives their stress sometime. But it is still bad for their health. After watching TV, they would feel a headache and a backache. I recommend doing exercise rather than watching TV. . Q40: what is your opinion about animal registration? I agree animal registration. There are a few people who keep dangerous animals. For the safe, animal registration is a need. Also, there are some pets that get abandoned by their masters. Animal registration will make the masters be more responsible for their pets.

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Hello there!@@ How are you doing? I hope you\'re doing well,kkkk.^^ See you! ~t. Hannah~ Q39: many mothers agree that TV has bad influence on children. Can you tell me some adverse effect?There are many adverse effects on watching TV. >>Correct!If children watch TV for a long time, they can’t concentrate on their study. >If children watch TV a lot, they cannot concentrate on their studies.They cannot do anything when they watch TV. >>Correct!Of course, it relives their stress sometime. >>Correct! But it is still bad for their health. >>Correct!After watching TV, they would feel a headache and a backache. >>Correct!I recommend doing exercise rather than watching TV. .>>Correct!Q40: what is your opinion about animal registration?I agree animal registration. >>I agree about this.There are a few people who keep dangerous animals. >>Correct!For the safe, animal registration is a need. >>To ensure safety, they should resgister animals.Also, there are some pets that get abandoned by their masters. >>Correct!Animal registration will make the masters be more responsible for their pets. >>Animal registrations will make sure that owners of animals will be more responsible in doing so.

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