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2013-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Giselle

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Q 43: compared to the past, some people are not very close to their relatives. Why? I guess some people should work for a long time at work because they live in capitalistic country. Maybe, they should earn a lot of money. And, it seems people prefer a small family rater than a large family because of a living cost. I think it is the reason that people are not very close to their relatives compared to the past. Let me take an example of my case, I don’t have enough time to meet my relatives frequently. Q44: do you think that spending time with or friends is a waste of time? Actually, I don’t’ have enough time to meet my friends frequently. But I want to meet my friends as much as possible because it relives my stress. I usually play soccer with my friends on weekend even though I don’t have enough time. It is good for my health. I can feel fresh air when playing soccer. Moreover, I can feel closer with my friends

강사 첨삭

Hello!
Thank you for sending this in.^^
All your efforts will soon pay off.
I am pretty sure with this!^^
Always smile!
See you!^^

Q 43: compared to the past, some people are not very close to their relatives. Why?
I guess some people should work for a long time at work because they live in capitalistic country.

>>I guess some people should work for a long time at work because they live in a capitalist country.
Maybe, they should earn a lot of money.

>>Correct!
And, it seems people prefer a small family rater than a large family because of a living cost.

>>And it seems, some people prefer to have a small family rather than a large one because of the cost of living.

I think it is the reason that people are not very close to their relatives compared to the past.

>>I think this is why people are not very close to their relatives unlike in the past.
Let me take an example of my case, I don’t have enough time to meet my relatives frequently.
>>Let us take for example my case. I don\'t have enough time to meet my relatives frequently.
Q44: do you think that spending time with or friends is a waste of time?
Actually, I don’t’ have enough time to meet my friends frequently.

>>Correct!
But I want to meet my friends as much as possible because it relives my stress.

>>Correct [relieves]
I usually play soccer with my friends on weekend even though I don’t have enough time.
>>I usually play soccer with my friends on weekends even though I don\'t have enough time to do so.

It is good for my health.

>>Correct!

I can feel fresh air when playing soccer.

>>I can feel the fresh air when I play soccer.

Moreover, I can feel closer with my friends

>>Moreover, I can feel like I am closer to my friends.

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