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2013-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Hannah

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Q52 : Tell me some bad side of drinking coffee. I don’t think that drinking coffee is good. According to the study, drinking coffee disrupt sleep because of caffeine. A lot of caffeine is bad for health. Also, a cup of coffee is expensive, in my think. In Korea, a cup of coffee is about 8 dollars. It is burden to me since I’m not a rich person. I know some fried chicken is 8 dollars too. I want to have a fried chicken rather than coffee. I think drinking coffee is a waste of my money. Q53 : these days, people are eating too many sweets. Agree? I agree that. According to the study, 70% of people said that they eat sweet more than 3 times per day. There are so many kinds of sweets such as candy, cookie, chocolates and so on. I can buy these easily at a convenient store. Also, there are many advertisements on sweets. We can see advertisements everywhere. Sweets look very gorgers and delicious in the advertisement. So I usually buy it on impulse.

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Hello [이름]!^^ I drink coffee!kkk^____^ See you! ~t. Hannah~ Q52 : Tell me some bad side of drinking coffee.I don’t think that drinking coffee is good. >>Correct!According to the study, drinking coffee disrupt sleep because of caffeine. >>Correct! A lot of caffeine is bad for health. >>A lot of inatke of caffeine is very bad for a person\'s health.Also, a cup of coffee is expensive, in my think. >>I also think that too much coffee is expensive. In Korea, a cup of coffee is about 8 dollars. >>Correct!  It is burden to me since I’m not a rich person. >>Correct!I know some fried chicken is 8 dollars too. >>I know fried chicken is 8 dollars.  I want to have a fried chicken rather than coffee. >>Correct!  I think drinking coffee is a waste of my money.>>Correct!Q53 : these days, people are eating too many sweets. Agree?I agree that. >>I agree with this one. According to the study, 70% of people said that they eat sweet more than 3 times per day. >>Correct!There are so many kinds of sweets such as candy, cookie, chocolates and so on. >>Correct!I can buy these easily at a convenient store. >>Correct!Also, there are many advertisements on sweets. >>Correct!We can see advertisements everywhere. >>Correct! Sweets look very gorgers and delicious in the advertisement. >>Sweets look yummy. So I usually buy it on impulse. >>So I usually buy it without even thinking about it.

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