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Q62 : do you think that taking supplements like vitamins is a good way to maintain good health?
I don’t agree that. Taking supplements cannot improve our health fundamentally. On the other hand, there are many good foods for our health such as Kimchi. It has not only good nutrition but also good taste.
Moreover, I recommend doing exercise rather than taking supplements. There are many people who stay their health by doing exercise regularly. If you do exercise consistently, your life becomes more health.
Let me take an example of my case. I go to the fitness center 5 times per week. I think it is more effective way to maintain good health.
Q63: do you want to watch a sport at the stadium, or would you want to go outside and watch them with your friends?
As I’m not a rich person so I have to save money. In Korea a entrance fee of the stadium is about twenty dollars. I think it is expensive. Buying ticket is a waste of money.
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Q62 : do you think that taking supplements like vitamins is a good way to maintain good health?I don’t agree that.
>>I don\'t agree with that.
Taking supplements cannot improve our health fundamentally.
>>Correct!
On the other hand, there are many good foods for our health such as Kimchi.
>>However, there a lot of doos tha\'s good for one\'s health usch as Kimchi.
It has not only good nutrition but also good taste.
>>It\'s not just nutritious but it tastes good too.Moreover, I recommend doing exercise rather than taking supplements.
>>Correct!
There are many people who stay their health by doing exercise regularly.
>>There are a lot of people who stay healthy by exercising regularly.
If you do exercise consistently, your life becomes more health.
>>I f you exercise regularly, you will be more healthy.Let me take an example of my case.
>>An example here is________.
I go to the fitness center 5 times per week.
>>Correct!
I think it is more effective way to maintain good health.>>I think it\'s more effective to maintain one\'s health.Q63: do you want to watch a sport at the stadium, or would you want to go outside and watch them with your friends?As I’m not a rich person so I have to save money.
>>Correct!
In Korea a entrance fee of the stadium is about twenty dollars
>>In Korea, an entrance fee for a stadium show is about 20 dollars.
. I think it is expensive.
>>Correct!
Buying ticket is a waste of money.
>>Correct!
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