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The computer is the best invention that makes our lives convenient. Computer makes our life more convenient. With this device, I can search a lot of useful information such as a delicious restaurant or good places. Also I can use online shopping. If I use online shopping mall, I don’t have to go to store in person. So I can save my trouble. And I can send e-mail to my friends. It is very convenient. Also I can get a lot of information quickly. I usually search information about movies. Actually, I’m a big fan of movies. So when I have a free time, I usually read magazines about movies, especially Hollywood movies. And I check information about delicious restaurants. It is very important because my girl friend like to have delicious dishes. If I find a new place, we go there and enjoy the dishes. I guess we can’t live without computers

Hi there! Good job in this composition. It is very good. Try to avoid starting your sentences with a conjunction though. See you again tomorrow. T. Hannah^^ The computer is the best invention that makes our lives convenient.  >> Correct^^ >> Computer is the best invention that made our life easy. Computer makes our life more convenient.  >> Correct^^ With this device, I can search a lot of useful information such as a delicious restaurant or good places.  >> With this device, I can search a lot of useful information such as a restaurant with delicious food or good places.  Also I can use online shopping.  >>  Also, I can shop online. If I use online shopping mall, I don’t have to go to store in person.  >> If I shop online, I don\'t have to go to the store in person. So I can save my trouble.  >> So, I won\'t be troubled. And I can send e-mail to my friends. >> Correct^^  It is very convenient. >> Correct^^Also I can get a lot of information quickly. >> Correct^^I usually search information about movies.  >> Correct^^ Actually, I’m a big fan of movies.  >> Correct^^ So when I have a free time, I usually read magazines about movies, especially Hollywood movies.  >> Correct^^ And I check information about delicious restaurants.  >> I also check information about restaurants with delicious food. It is very important because my girl friend like to have delicious dishes. >> It is very important for me because my girlfriend loves eating delicious dishes. If I find a new place, we go there and enjoy the dishes.  >> Correct^^I guess we can’t live without computers >> Correct^^