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2011-10-26 · 첨삭 강사 Vaness

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Please describe techno mart after it suffered some bizarre shaking last july 06. i think, it's insensitivity towards safety. if i lived around there, i can't believe the building. i'm timid boy, i always hope safety, 2 he and others owners are unavoidable to work in there. i think it's so a sad story. the attiude of Korean don't easily change, for example, regarding wellbeing or safety. it's serious matters in Korea 3 i think in Building Stores Owners requested them. maybe i needed scientific information and official safety figures. it's important that thier business. 4 he said, our company or others owners is victims. the building tested and completely constructed but it's insensitivity towards safety. it expect, don't recover.

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Hi! You did a good job in writing this composition. I had a good time reading it. I noticed a few mistakes. I hope you will check them out. Have a good evening. T. Lara Please describe techno mart after it suffered some bizarre shaking last july 06.>> Please describe techno mart after it suffered some bizarre shaking last July 06.i think, it\'s insensitivity towards safety. >> I think, It is due to its insensitivity towards safety. if i lived around there, i can\'t believe the building. >> If I had lived around there, I can\'t trust the building.i\'m timid boy, i always hope safety,>> I\'m a timid boy, I always hope for safety,2he and others owners are unavoidable to work in there. >> he and others owners cannot avoid to work  there.i think it\'s so a sad story. >> I think it\'s such a sad story. the attiude of Korean don\'t easily change, for example, regarding wellbeing or safety. >> The attitude of Koreans don\'t easily change, for example, regarding wellbeing or safety.it\'s serious matters in Korea>>These are serious matters in Korea.3i think in Building Stores Owners requested them. >> I think in Buildings, store owners requested them. maybe i needed scientific information and official safety figures. >> Maybe I need scientific information and official safety figures.it\'s important that thier business. >> It\'s important for their business.4he said, our company or others owners is victims. >> He said, our company or others owners are victims. the building tested and completely constructed but it\'s insensitivity towards safety. >> The building was tested and completely constructed but it had insensitivity towards safety. it expect, don\'t recover. >> It is expected, that they won\'t recover.

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