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Please describe techno mart after it suffered some bizarre shaking last july 06.
i think, it's insensitivity towards safety. if i lived around there, i can't believe the building.
i'm timid boy, i always hope safety,
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he and others owners are unavoidable to work in there.
i think it's so a sad story. the attiude of Korean don't easily change, for example, regarding wellbeing or safety.
it's serious matters in Korea
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i think in Building Stores Owners requested them. maybe i needed scientific information and official safety figures.
it's important that thier business.
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he said, our company or others owners is victims.
the building tested and completely constructed but it's insensitivity towards safety. it expect, don't recover.
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Hi!
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T. Lara
Please describe techno mart after it suffered some bizarre shaking last july 06.>> Please describe techno mart after it suffered some bizarre shaking last July 06.i think, it\'s insensitivity towards safety.
>> I think, It is due to its insensitivity towards safety.
if i lived around there, i can\'t believe the building.
>> If I had lived around there, I can\'t trust the building.i\'m timid boy, i always hope safety,>> I\'m a timid boy, I always hope for safety,2he and others owners are unavoidable to work in there.
>> he and others owners cannot avoid to work there.i think it\'s so a sad story.
>> I think it\'s such a sad story.
the attiude of Korean don\'t easily change, for example, regarding wellbeing or safety.
>> The attitude of Koreans don\'t easily change, for example, regarding wellbeing or safety.it\'s serious matters in Korea>>These are serious matters in Korea.3i think in Building Stores Owners requested them.
>> I think in Buildings, store owners requested them.
maybe i needed scientific information and official safety figures.
>> Maybe I need scientific information and official safety figures.it\'s important that thier business.
>> It\'s important for their business.4he said, our company or others owners is victims.
>> He said, our company or others owners are victims. the building tested and completely constructed but it\'s insensitivity towards safety.
>> The building was tested and completely constructed but it had insensitivity towards safety.
it expect, don\'t recover.
>> It is expected, that they won\'t recover.
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