Preperations for G20
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However, I think the Korean government is trying to hide a little massy scene in Seoul such as unorganized signs. I've travelled many countries but when I saw something not arranged on the street, I feel humanism. I don't think they are not mannered or organized. We all have some massy things and dark parts of the city. I don't mean it will be ok even though the meeting is massy. We should offer perfect place for the meeting but on the street or in the public it will be natural the leaders see something unorganized unless it bothers the meeting. The government needs to respect Koreans' citizenship and Korean citizen should behave mature enough to hold the international meeting
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However, I think the Korean government is trying to hide a little massy scene in Seoul such as unorganized signs.
>>>However, I think that the Korean government is trying to hide some unorganized signs.
I've travelled many countries but when I saw something not arranged on the street, I feel humanism.
>>> I've travelled many countries but when I pass by unorganized streets, I felt bad about what I observed.
I don't think they are not mannered or organized.
>>>(you may not include this)
We all have some massy things and dark parts of the city.
>>>Well, we also have unorganized streets or even street signs and dark areas in the city.
I don't mean it will be ok even though the meeting is massy.
>>>I’m not saying that unorganized streets affect the meeting.
We should offer perfect place for the meeting but on the street or in the public it will be natural the leaders see something unorganized unless it bothers the meeting.
>>>It is advisable to hold such meeting in a perfect place and not near the street, unless the leaders are not bothered by such mess.
The government needs to respect Koreans' citizenship and Korean citizen should behave mature enough to hold the international meeting.
>>>The government should keep the respect of the citizenry and the citizenry should do the same for the international meeting.
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