Pretend you woke up one day and there were no rules

2016-02-25 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

In primitive times, there were no laws or rules. People just obeyed customs and norms that have been created in the community by their ancestors. Children grew up learning them naturally without formal education programs. In modern society, there are two kinds of rules. One is a law that can punish violators and the other one is just common social/cultural norms that require people to follow, although they are not legally binding. When a community was small, a law was not necessary because people were governed by its own rules. However, as communities grow and become a nation, the inherited customs were not enough to control the society. So, the more organized and systematic ways of governing the society have emerged to protect individual’s benefits and improve citizen’s wellbeing. Now, we cannot think of our society without laws or rules. When they become nullified or are removed all of a sudden, our society will become chaos. Burglary, depredation, and vandalism will be prevalent.

강사 첨삭

Good day, Sir [이름]!

We already reached the fourth day of the week.

I am so happy that you are always energetic in class.

All of the things you mentioned below are right.
There are a lot of laws nowadays.

People should follow it in order to avoid accidents and fines.

Thank you so much for your composition.

Have a great day.
Teacher Nina


In primitive times, there were no laws or rules.

>> correct

People just obeyed customs and norms that have been created in the community by their ancestors.

>> correct

Children grew up learning them naturally without formal education programs.

>> correct

In modern society, there are two kinds of rules.

>> correct

One is a law that can punish violators and the other one is just common social/cultural norms that require people to follow, although they are not legally binding.

>> correct

When a community was small, a law was not necessary because people were governed by its own rules.

>> correct

However, as communities grow and become a nation, the inherited customs were not enough to control the society.

>> correct

So, the more organized and systematic ways of governing the society have emerged to protect individual’s benefits and improve citizen’s wellbeing.

>> correct

Now, we cannot think of our society without laws or rules.

>> correct

When they become nullified or are removed all of a sudden, our society will become chaos.

>> When they become nullified or are removed all of a sudden, our society will be in chaos.

Burglary, depredation, and vandalism will be prevalent. \\

>> correct

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