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2016-03-30 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

학생이 쓴 원문

10 teams had practice games until last Sunday.And I am a little satsified with my team rank.My favorite team KIA ranking is 5.Samsung and Nexen built a new baseball stadium.And Park He Min score first homerun in the new baseball stadium.And yesterday I heard KIA bought Im [Name] yong.Im [Name] young is key player.But he went on the gamble last year.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Good evening:)

Thank you for sharing your short essay. :)

You really are a baseball fanatic.

Maybe one day, you will be  a baseball player.

You will be famous; You will have a lot of followers; and

a lot of people will idolize you.

Don\'t you like that?

I will see you in our class. Have a great night! ^^


~~ Teacher Kris


10 teams had practice games until last Sunday.

>> 10 teams had their game practice until last Saturday.

And I am a little satsified with my team rank.

>> Correct

My favorite team KIA ranking is 5.

>> My favorite team, KIA, ranked 5.

Samsung and Nexen built a new baseball stadium.

>> Correct

And Park He Min score first homerun in the new baseball stadium.

>> Park He Min scored the first homerun in the new baseball stadium.

And yesterday I heard KIA bought Im [Name] yong.

>> Correct

Im [Name] young is key player.

>> Im [Name] Young is a key player.

But he went on the gamble last year.

>> But he went gambling last year.

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