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2025-07-24 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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popular K-pop group is facing a tough decision as they consider renewing their contract with their management company. The members are worried about the company’s strict rules that limit their creativity and artistic expression, feeling that this has affected their music and growth as artists. On the other hand, the management company insists that sticking to its terms is important for keeping their popularity and getting support for promotions. The group needs to decide whether to negotiate for more creative freedom, which could risk their public image, or accept the company’s terms to protect their career. What do you think they should do? In that situation, I think company should give more freedom to idol so that Idol can express their creativity and identity. Idol is artist they should express their creativity and write their own song and be free. As a company they can have strict rules about their responsibility, but not on their creativity,

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this [이름]. I agree, they should express their creativity in order to evolve and find their best potentials.

In that situation, I think company should give more freedom to idol so that Idol can express their creativity and identity. 
>>> In that situation/case, I think the company should give more freedom to idols so that these Idols can express their creativity and identity.   
Idol is artist they should express their creativity and write their own song and be free. 
>>> Idols are artists, and they should express their creativity and write their own song and be free.   
>>> OR:  Idols are artists, and they should be free to express their creativity and write their own songs.   
As a company, they can have strict rules about their responsibility, but not on their creativity,
>>> correct  

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