Proper Compulsiveness makes it better
학생이 쓴 원문
What is your main weakness? How do you try to overcome it?
>>> My main weakness is leakage of autonomy because I\'m a passionate person only when I\'m doing what I like. Unless It is my style, I immediately become a lazy man. It will be really great if I can concentrate on only what I like. But the world is not easy. To get my happiness in the future, I must do whatever I don\'t want, for example studying. In conclusion, I need a proper level of surveillance and coercion. If I in the condition of someone\'s observation, I can do anything well.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille
What is your main weakness? How do you try to overcome it?
>>> My main weakness is leakage of autonomy because I\'m a passionate person only when I\'m doing what I like.
>> CORRECT!>>> My main weakness is leakage of autonomy because I\'m a passionate person only when I\'m doing what I like.
Unless It is my style, I immediately become a lazy man.
>> CORRECT!It will be really great if I can concentrate on only what I like.
>> CORRECT!OR >> It will be really great if I can focus on only what I like.
But the world is not easy.
>> CORRECT!To get my happiness in the future, I must do whatever I don\'t want, for example studying.
>> To get my happiness in the future, I must do whatever it is, even if I don\'t want, for example studying.
In conclusion, I need a proper level of surveillance and coercion.
>> In conclusion, I need a proper level of surveillance and encouragement. If I in the condition of someone\'s observation, I can do anything well.
>> If I am in the condition of someone\'s observation, I can do anything well.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.