Punishment
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
- Jay,
It would be good if the lawmakers think like you do. Let\'s say they amend the law about drunk driving according to what you said, there\'s another problem we have to consider - the law enforcers. They should enforce the law properly and nobody should be above the law no matter who the person is in society.
~Lynn
It would be nice if I had the power to make some laws for the drunk driving.
>> It would be nice if I have the power to make some laws for drunk driving.
There are so many accidents related to drinking and the drunk driving occupies the biggest part.
>> There are so many accidents related to drinking and drunk driving occupies the biggest part.
The laws have been changed as stronger because of the YoonChangHo incident, but many celebrities were caught by the drunk driving.
>> The law has been changed and it became stronger because of the Yoon Chang Ho incident, but many celebrities were caught drunk driving recently.
I think people don\'t care about drunk driving seriously yet, so I want to make it stronger than now.
>> correct!
Of course, the driving license would be revoked and the law would be applied differently as the ratio of alcohol in the body.
>> Of course, the driver\'s license should be revoked and the punishment/penalty should vary according to the amount of alcohol in the body.
The weakest law I thought is just a revocation of license and the strongest law is a life imprisonment.
>> The weakest penalty I thought is just revocation of license and the strongest is life imprisonment.
In addition, I want to make a law for adolescents who bully other people or even kill someone at that time.
>> correct!
The present law is generous to younger people, so I think what about giving a punishment to their parents, not to them.
>> correct!
It would be harder to adolescents rather than just giving a weak punishment.
>> correct!
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