Q ; Tell me about your happiest birthday memory.(in 5 sentences)
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Hi [이름]!
This is such a wonderful composition.
I was imagining the situation while I was reading it. ^^
I\'m really happy that you have this memory.
I am grateful that you shared it with me.
~~t. Ally
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I’ve never experienced wonderful birthday party thing.
>> I\'ve never really experienced wonderful birthday party kind of celebration.
Back in my childhood, my mom used to make seaweed soup and rice cake(It’s very common Korean birthday breakfast) for me on my birthday.
>> Back in my childhood days, my mom used to make seaweed soup and rice cake, a very common Korean birthday breakfast, for me on my birthday.
Back then, I took it for granted, but now it was my heartwarming memories.
>> Back then, I took it for granted, but now it has become one of the most heartwarming memories I have.
I can say that I was really happy on my first birthday after getting married.(I got married January 10 and my birthday was march 2)
>> CORRECT!
My mom, my mother-in-law and my wife made birthday breakfast for me, and I heard happy birthday song from the biggest number of people in my life.
>>My mom, my mother-in-law and my wife cooked up a birthday breakfast for me, and then the biggest number of people I\'ve ever had with me sang me a happy birthday song.
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