Question
학생이 쓴 원문
1. What was your first mobile phone?
Kindergarten students / purple folderphone / for safety / but mostly use in texting with friends
2. Do you often use your mobile phone for texting or calls?
 I use it for texting more/ because my mobile phone payment system has limited call time/ most friends prefer to text/
3. Will you buy a new one in the future?
Yes if i need/ old phone could suddenly broken / change phone once every five years
 
4. How has your mobile phone changed your life?
 have gone shopping less / phone’s funtion is excellent> camera, calculator, drawing tools, recorder, and more things can replaced with applications
This situation made an new industry revolution . And lead company at that time is still have influence in our life
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Alice!
Thank you for sending me your bulleted cue words for our supposed discussion today. See you tomorrow for its discussion.
Take care today and see you then!
-T. Donna =)
Kindergarten students / purple folderphone / for safety / but mostly use in texting with friends
>> Correct!
Or: folding phone
2. Do you often use your mobile phone for texting or calls?
 I use it for texting more/ because my mobile phone payment system has limited call time/ most friends prefer to text/
 I use it for texting more/ because my mobile phone payment system has limited call time/ most friends prefer to text/
>> Correct!
3. Will you buy a new one in the future?
Yes if i need/ old phone could suddenly broken / change phone once every five years
 
>> Correct!
Or: I
4. How has your mobile phone changed your life?
 have gone shopping less / phone’s funtion is excellent> camera, calculator, drawing tools, recorder, and more things can replaced with applications
This situation made an new industry revolution . And lead company at that time is still have influence in our life
>> Correct!
Or: function
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