Rabbit
학생이 쓴 원문
Rabbits eat carrots.Rabbit is one of my favourite pet or animal.
The colours of rabbit could be white,brown,black or grey.
Rabbits have long ears and they are good at jumping.
Rabbits have very short tail and it's shape is sort of round shape.
I don't actually know why rabbit's tails are not long like the other animal.
Some white rabbits have red eyes because ther're eyes don't have any eye colour so you could see the colour of the blood instead.Well, I think it's horrible!~
강사 첨삭
Hi there Emma!^_-
Happy Wednesday!
According to what I\'ve read, some rabbits have the condition called albinism or complete lack of pigment. That is why their eyes don\'t have any color. Their eyes only reflect the color of their blood.
In some cases, rabbits having red eyes (that is not inborn0 could mean that they\'re suffering from infections or diseases. They should be taken to veterinary clinics for proper treatment.
Anyway, Emma, thank you for this composition. It was a good one.
I\'ll see you in class lassie.:p^____^
=Teacher Mayleen=
Rabbits eat carrots.
>> CORRECT
OR: Rabbits main food is carrots.
Rabbit is one of my favourite pet or animal.
>> Rabbit is one of my favorite pet animals.
The colours of rabbit could be white,brown,black or grey.
>> Rabbits come in white, brown, black, or gray in color.
Rabbits have long ears and they are good at jumping.
>> Rabbits have long ears. They are good in jumping.
Rabbits have very short tail and it\'s shape is sort of round shape.
>> Rabbits have very short tails and is round in shape.
I don\'t actually know why rabbit\'s tails are not long like the other animal.
>> I don\'t actually know why rabbits\' tails aren\'t long like the other animals.
Some white rabbits have red eyes because ther\'re eyes don\'t have any eye colour so you could see the colour of the blood instead.
>> Some white rabbits have red eyes because it reflects the color of their blood instead.
Well, I think it\'s horrible!~
>> Well, I think it looks horrible.
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