Rainy day

2015-11-17 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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Rainy day is bad and awful day because I can't ride bikes and play football. We have to have umbrellars when it's raining. It is sweater and we can see slugs and worms. My friends step on the worms and kill them. It is so horrible. There is also a good thing when it's raining my mum take me to the school by car and I dom't have to walk. In Korea there is a drought and it will get better. I really hope that drought will get better. What is your favourite things and not favorite things when it's raining, teacher Mayleen?

강사 첨삭

Hello Min!:) Happy Tuesday!   Just like you, I don\'t like rainy days that much. My house is far from the road so I have to walk a distance of about 100 meters before I reach the jeepney station. During rainy days, my pants and shoes get dirty because of mud and water splatter. We are also experiencing a drought here in the Philippines. We call it El Nino. Because of that, farmers are having difficulties in planting their crops because the water isn\'t enough for their fields. That\'s why you were right when you said that we really have to conserve water. Accumulated rainwater can be used in cleaning outside the house, for flushing the toilet, or for watering the plants.   Min, thank you for this composition. I\'ve made some modifications so kindly check on those. You did a good job, okay?^_-   =Teacher Mayleen=     Rainy day is bad and awful day because I can\'t ride bikes and play football. >> A rainy day is a bad day because I can\'t ride my bike and play football outside.   We have to have umbrellars when it\'s raining. >> We need to have umbrellas when it\'s raining.   It is sweater and we can see slugs and worms. >> The ground is wet and we can see slugs and worms coming out.   My friends step on the worms and kill them. >> My friends step on these worms and kill them.   It is so horrible. >> CORRECTED OR: It is a horrible sight.   There is also a good thing when it\'s raining my mum take me to the school by car and I dom\'t have to walk. >> The good thing about rainy days is that my mom take me to school by car so I don\'t have to walk.   In Korea there is a drought and it will get better. >> Here in Korea, there is a drought.   I really hope that drought will get better. >> I hope that the drought will soon come to an end. What is your favourite things and not favorite things when it\'s raining, teacher Mayleen? >> What are the things you like and dislike about rainy days, Teacher Mayleen?

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