Raise pets
학생이 쓴 원문
The dogs and cats have been our friends for a long time. the more people who live along lonely are getting more, the more people who raise pets to overcome their feeling of lonely. These pets are giving comfort to their masters. I think that is the right decision if you are in darkness. However, if you decided to raise a pet, you should have a responsibility to your pet and don\'t let pets feeling lonely like what you felt before. As much as pets give you a feeling of comfort, you should be able to give same feeling to your pets.
강사 첨삭
Hi John!
You have followed really good sentence patterns in your composition.
I hope you keep up the good work.
You can also apply these in our conversations.
I want to hear more from you.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The dogs and cats have been our friends for a long time.
>> Dogs and cats have been our friends for a long time.
the more people who live along lonely are getting more, the more people who raise pets to overcome their feeling of lonely.
>> The more people get lonely, the more they want to raise pets in order to overcome that feeling.
These pets are giving comfort to their masters.
>> Correct
I think that is the right decision if you are in darkness.
>> I think that is the right decision if you are living in the darkness.
However, if you decided to raise a pet, you should have a responsibility to your pet and don\'t let pets feeling lonely like what you felt before.
>> However, if you decide to raise a pet, you should have the responsibility of not letting your pets feel lonely like you felt before.
As much as pets give you a feeling of comfort, you should be able to give same feeling to your pets.
>> As much as pets give you a feeling of comfort, you should be able to give the same feeling to your pets.
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