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One case emphasizing Atget’s photos as the art works even doesn’t consider Atget and his photography as its object of criticism because it has a deep attachment to flowery terms for aesthetic expression.
>>In one case, emphasizing Atget\'s photos as artworks does not consider Atget and his photography as an object of criticism because it has a deep attachment to flowery terms for aesthetic expression.
Nevertheless, this kind of old content of critic sight can be located at open context of Atget’s photography.
>>Nevertheless, this kind of critic can be located at the open context of Atget\'s photography.
But, the others which oppose the artistic value of Atget\'s works tailors his photography with its own standard of the art principle.
>>But, the others, who oppose the artistic value of Atget\'s works, tailored his photography with its own standard art principle.
Moreover, this type of critic sight doesn\'t originally aim Atget but the other things.
>>Moreover, this type of critic does not originally aim Atget, rather aims other things.
Atget\'s photos started to be known and have been facing variety of opinions criticizing his works since his exhibition at MOMA in 1981.
>>Atget\'s photos started to be popular and have been facing a lot of criticisms about his work since his exhibition at MOMA in 1981.Especially, the art magazine OCTOBER and its authors made negative criticisms about Atget\'s works without studying his life and his works.
>>The art magazine OCTOBER and its authors especially made negative comments about Atget\'s works without even studying his life and works.
But instead, they criticize him using anecdotal contents.
>>Instead, they criticize him using anecdotal contents.
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