Refer to the picture I sent you on Skype. Give me your thoughts in a different situation. 1. What wi
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1. I will tell them their behavior was really rude without any respect for art work and artist and I didn\'t made that artwork for being used for social movements. Also, I will tell them that it was not a good choice to make people hear their voice and they just lose many people who might have listened to their voice including me.
2. I heard that the Mona lisa is covered with many glasses that can block bullets so I would satisfy with destroying one glass at most. If I were that angry person who think people don\'t concern environment or agriculture, I would do the most noticable behavior I can do. For example, casting paint ball, , toy arrow that sticks to glass can be good. Because I want as many people as possible to listen to my voice. Or I can put some meaning like casting green tide to send my message.
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Hello [이름] [이름]!
For this homework, thank you for giving your thoughts on two different scenarios. I have seen two sides of you if you are the artist and if you are the protester. You have shown passion for what you are doing. Like Number 1, it shows how dedicated you are as an artist, and on number two, it also shows that you want your voice to be heard when you want to address something to someone.
Great job and keep it up!
T. Aki~
1. I will tell them their behavior was really rude without any respect for art work and artist and I didn\'t made that artwork for being used for social movements.
>>> I will tell them their behavior was really rude without any respect for the artwork and the artist and I didn\'t make that artwork to be used for social movements.
Also, I will tell them that it was not a good choice to make people hear their voice and they just lose many people who might have listened to their voice including me.
>>> Also, I will tell them that it was not a good choice to make people hear their voice and they just lose many people who might have listened to their voice including me.
2. I heard that the Mona lisa is covered with many glasses that can block bullets so I would satisfy with destroying one glass at most.
>>> I heard that the Mona Lisa painting is covered with many glasses that can block bullets so I would be satisfied with destroying one glass at most.
If I were that angry person who think people don\'t concern environment or agriculture, I would do the most noticable behavior I can do.
>>> If I were that angry person who thinks people aren\'t concern environment or agriculture, I would do the most noticeable behavior I can do.
For example, casting paint ball, , toy arrow that sticks to glass can be good. Because I want as many people as possible to listen to my voice.
>>> For example, casting a paintball, or toy arrow that sticks to glass can be good. Because I want as many people as possible to listen to my voice.
Or I can put some meaning like casting green tide to send my message.
>> CORRECT!
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