Religion

2014-08-20 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Should people follow the religion of their parents, or should they have the liberty to choose another? Why or why not? Give some examples. I think people have the liberty to choose their religion because religions would mean "freedom" itself. therefore if their parents try to force their children to follow their religions, their children would have blind belief in the religion and then, they might lose a c[이름]ce to have the other religions.

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Should people follow the religion of their parents, or should they have the liberty to choose another? Why or why not? Give some examples.
I think people have the liberty to choose their religion because religions would mean \"freedom\" itself.

>>correct
therefore if their parents try to force their children to follow their religions, their children would have blind belief in the religion and then, they might lose a c[이름]ce to have the other religions.

>>correct

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