Religion
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Should people follow the religion of their parents, or should they have the liberty to choose another? Why or why not? Give some examples.
I think people have the liberty to choose their religion because religions would mean \"freedom\" itself.
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therefore if their parents try to force their children to follow their religions, their children would have blind belief in the religion and then, they might lose a c[이름]ce to have the other religions.
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