Religion is good thing but...
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When I was born my parents they are alredy christian.
And so I am grew up to be a christian naturally.
When I was born before to the 23years old, I was a really religious person with strong faith.
But suddenly someday, I heard about pastor of my church was a religious was involved in a big crime.
After that case, I don\'t believe a religion.
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Hi Ann :)
Oh, that\'s a sad story. It\'s so upsetting how one person can affect another person\'s faith. He is not worthy to be a pastor at all.
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When I was born my parents they are alredy christian.
>> When I was born, my parents were already Christians.
And so I am grew up to be a christian naturally.
>> So I grew up in a Christian family naturally.
When I was born before to the 23years old, I was a really religious person with strong faith.
>> Years before I turned 23, I was a very religious person with strong faith.
But suddenly someday, I heard about pastor of my church was a religious was involved in a big crime.
>> But suddenly one day, I heard about a pastor, in our church, was involved in a serious crime.
After that case, I don\'t believe a religion.
>> After that, I lost faith and not believed in religion anymore.
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